looking forward to extinction
you only get to imagine now
so make the most
the gods expire
they have use-by dates
any doctrine does
we're characters
no single truth outlasts
the world it circumscribes
the limits of my language
are
pillar of salt if you turn around
it's only a matter of time
not quite sure whether this a kind of complete quip
ReplyDeleteor a fragment (possibly beginning) of something with further to travel
but I guess that
the end of all time and all space
ought to fit quite well
in a haiku
You could have a subsection on end of the world poems. It works well as is, but it might be worth playing with removing those two single lines in the middle - “any doctrine does" and "we’re characters” - both good, but the poem becomes even more chilling and powerful than it already is, if you tell us less. I particularly like the truncated lines ('make the most' and 'limits of my language/are’ which of course illustrate the point). I also very much like the little poem (not a haiku but that maybe adds a touch of humour) in your comment. “but I guess that” could be the title.
ReplyDeletethanks ---
ReplyDeleteso the poem would then be
looking forward to extinction
you only get to imagine now
so make the most
the gods expire
they have use-by dates
no single truth outlasts
the world it circumscribes
the limits of my language
are
pillar of salt if you turn around
it's only a matter of time
?
shall ponder
Yes. Chilling.
DeleteI love your idea Kit - and Magdalena gave me the thought to change the order of the rhythm just a little bit.
ReplyDeletelike this...
you only get to imagine now
so make the most
any doctrine does
gods expire
they have use-by dates
no single truth outlasts
the world it circumscribes
we're characters
the limits of my language are
pillar of salt if you turn around
it's only a matter of time
still pondering this one, thanks
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