In my journey's early days I looked for a 'spark' to take the fateful step, necessary to leave my island and commence my ramblings. After trying a few things I settled on a divine intervention as motivation.
How could I, a novice, a beginner, a boy-man launch my own 'escape'...unless by fate
Aligned to a rare cosmic gateway
an apparition, a signal
a chance celestial slipstream
coupled to novice instincts
provokes motivation and desire
patience is always tricky,
made uneasy by muted perception
releases obscure navigational
and meta-physical
calculations
now five major planets
conjure a rarer alchemy
briefly suspending mirages
abstraction, geometry
and another kinds of purity
providence a remedy
for some,
for others it would cause
activity
in the imagination
image: Copernicus synthetic polymer and enamel paint on insulation material & perspex on ply 45cm x 45cm - j skewes
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Draft 1.
Aligned to a rare cosmic gateway
this apparition
chance celestial slipstream
coupled its portal to relevant human instincts
motivations and desires
patience is always tricky
made uneasy by muted navigational
perceptions and obscure
meta-physic
calculations
now five major planets would
conjure a rare alchemy
briefly suspending the geometric mirage
for abstraction of another kind of purity
reason and purpose
providence a remedy
in the eye of the beheld
some resolve
for others it would cause activity in the imagination
and time to prepare
365+1 ' Signal' post 6 August 2016 see here
I like the planet
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so many exo-planets being found all the time
... it's time we started writing about them I guess
The rythm of this second version is good and the poem more pleasant to read, much better to my great satisfaction!
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