tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3885784058796895333.post679332769193373405..comments2023-06-04T17:49:10.461+10:00Comments on Project 52: Kit Kelen - godbother #6 - I have to do these things myself Kit Kelenhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/01039514155142268468noreply@blogger.comBlogger8125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3885784058796895333.post-38113046358471951242017-01-12T05:27:41.089+11:002017-01-12T05:27:41.089+11:00I believe that the gods have always walked among u...I believe that the gods have always walked among us and they still walk among us, so I don't know of any observations we mortals could make about anything (including them) that would bother them, who are, I think, impervious to most feelings about us except for maybe pity. <br /><br />What actions they pity the most is probably our destruction of the environment, our hubris (of course), and our increasing incapacity to love anyone but ourselves. And maybe, just maybe, our society's general disdain for the imaginal, for the Spirit, and for the various mysteries. <br /><br />All of which probably sounds quite daft. <br /><br />A godbother is generally a pejorative term, right? Someone who bothers others with their talk of the divine. So just asking, who and what are you addressing in these poems?Rob Schacknehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09820621386743394312noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3885784058796895333.post-22478871037455992882017-01-12T05:18:40.204+11:002017-01-12T05:18:40.204+11:00This comment has been removed by the author.Rob Schacknehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09820621386743394312noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3885784058796895333.post-91003544010549912162017-01-12T01:41:01.171+11:002017-01-12T01:41:01.171+11:00can you suggest the kinds of actions you'd hav...can you suggest the kinds of actions you'd have in mind?Kit Kelenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01039514155142268468noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3885784058796895333.post-39845303521917728572017-01-12T01:12:49.281+11:002017-01-12T01:12:49.281+11:00I see. Observations. Not actions.
I see. Observations. Not actions. <br />Rob Schacknehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09820621386743394312noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3885784058796895333.post-30997713218455021772017-01-11T23:02:57.942+11:002017-01-11T23:02:57.942+11:00yes, I don't think those two stray lines are t...yes, I don't think those two stray lines are the ending... I think the ending's already there (as you observed)... but they're kind of connected ... so I wasn't quite ready to cut them loose yet... maybe a link to something somewhere else ... not sure <br /><br />somehow I'd like the whole thing to be a little wilder and more challenging, especially grammaticallyKit Kelenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01039514155142268468noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3885784058796895333.post-54889497898898914782017-01-11T22:05:46.199+11:002017-01-11T22:05:46.199+11:00I’m also finding myself working on one section. I...I’m also finding myself working on one section. I think the poem works very well for godbother (another great title) and the snappy imperatives in this make it quite different to other poems in the section so far - it works for me. I just have to say that I now have this song on running repeat in my head (it’s okay - I love Radiohead): https://youtu.be/HA_burPl6z0 <br />Personally, I’d remove the last 2 lines of the poem which would also strengthen the theme. I particularly like the two lines before it (penultimate stanza) and ending there would have more punch (for me at least). But if you keep the last lines, it’s not clear why they’re separated from the rest of the poem. Magdalena Ballhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00182314078304734996noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3885784058796895333.post-46647486500599179152017-01-11T17:46:02.768+11:002017-01-11T17:46:02.768+11:00a set of observations that might bother gods a set of observations that might bother gods Kit Kelenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01039514155142268468noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3885784058796895333.post-25529672969334522182017-01-11T17:25:18.870+11:002017-01-11T17:25:18.870+11:00Good poem, Kit. How would you define 'godsboth...Good poem, Kit. How would you define 'godsbother'?Rob Schacknehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09820621386743394312noreply@blogger.com